Thursday, January 12, 2012

Non-Fiction Story

    Cody A. Blair 
    English 2 H.
    Non-Fiction Story
    My First Time Wake Boarding
    Learning to wakeboard seemed like it would be a daunting task at first because I was trying to at an older age than everyone else. It was my first time trying to even get up, and I was at Camp Crystal summer camp. I was with a group who had all wake boarded before so I felt like I had to get up on my first try. One other boy was going to go in front of me so I watched how he got up to try and learn the techniques needed. He got up easily and rode around the lake for 5 or so minutes. Finally it was my turn to try and I was feeling extremely nervous because the water was starting to get choppy. The counselor tossed me the pull rope and gave me some last minute advice before we started. Then it was time to go. I heard the engine start and the rope got taut. I let the boat pull me up and twisted my legs like they had told me to do. I stayed up and contradictory to my beliefs I did not immediately face-plant into the water. Once I stayed up they were telling me to get outside of the wake so that I could try to jump. I was nervous enough trying to stay up because the water was running over my feet, and I did not know if it was supposed to do that or not. After a couple minutes I got the nerve to try and I immediately fell face first into the water. After the counselors asked if I was alright they tossed the rope to me again, and I was able to get up again. This time I immediately headed for the outside of the wake, and did not fall. When I got out there it was completely different because I felt like I had so much more control over the board and my own movements. After my round of going around the lake I got into the boat where the counselors congratulated me and told me I had done great. For the rest of the time I got to ride around in the boat listening to the Wop and had a great day because of this experience.
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  1. ChadwkvJanuary 20, 2012 at 11:44 AM

    Though i do enjoy your story, i find myself slightly confused as to what the idea/moral of the story was about. The story does a pretty good job at telling the story about your first time wakeboarding, i personally can bring myself to feel how you felt, through reading your essay. Anyways, back to what i was saying before, i am not entirely certain on what the idea your story is trying to convey. I believe that you are trying to say either: a) if you try something new, there is always a chance at success, b) it isnt that you fall down that matters, what matters is that you get back up, or c) never give up. If i managed to list the moral of the short story then i think that you did a very good job making that point, it was just hard to figure out which of the multiple possibilities was the one you were aiming for. Lastly, you did a decent job on detail and figurative language, i feel as if you eaxplained a little but more of the physical aspect, i could really feel how you felt. Overall, id say this is well done.

    Chad

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